Saturday, February 18, 2012

How do I describe someone crying?

I'm writing a story for my English Coursework and I'm stuck on describing a person who knows he is soon going to die. It's meant to be a gothic story. And description about the surrounding, what he hears what he sees will help as well.

But here is the twist, u cannot use the word TEAR/ Tears in your description. Any comments will be appreciated thanks!How do I describe someone crying?
"He reflected on his mortal life, knowing that it would all be gone soon. His eyes bleed with pain" - it sounds creepy, but effective if you want anymore help with the story, then just give me some more info on what your looking for.

hope this helps you :)
Is it supposed to be written in first person or third person?



But anyways, you could write something along the lines of : he collapsed on the floor, dejected, swollen with emotions and realizations of his fate (just include his internal wounds and try to portray a feeling of crushed, hopelessness), mention the dark colors, sad or broken objects he sees (anything from a crushed flower to a broken childrens toy...something sad and equally hopeless), maybe since he's so sad and overcome by emotion, he tunes out his hearing in a way, so he could hear a haunting ringing in his ears and all he hears are the thoughts running through his head.



For the crying part, you could write a cliche like, "the floodgates opened"...haha, but that would be dumb...so maybe like, he tried to blink away the emotions that blurred his vision...or you could write that they poured out from within and rolled down his cheeks...stained his cheeks



something like that...if that's even useful. haha, hope that helps!How do I describe someone crying?
I'm no expert on gothic stories, but I can dance around "tears" with a little creative omission



"His face showed distress and as he closed his eyes, drops slowly ran down his face. He had wiped them so much they were red and swollen. When he went to look around, his vision was blurry; it was difficult for him to see clearly."



The guy WAS sweating buckets and no matter what happened to his eyes, drops of -SWEAT- RAN DOWN HIS FACE from his forehead, right?



Stick him someplace hot %26amp; humid, in the rain or in the shower and it's a no-contest, I think.



As for what he hears, I'll leave that to you and the context of your story.
The blank, emotionless expression swept over his face as the realization of the moment gradually seeped in. The fear seemed to rise behind his eyes. Like a caged animal, he laid there. Paralyzed by the tragic feeling of isolation, he closed his eyes and gazed into fields of nothingness. He felt the water creep out of his eyes, and he gently whispered to himself, "I will die."How do I describe someone crying?
His eyes filled with water, they became glossy and shining as the light hit them.
use the five senses. and find replacements for tears. like the warm drops streaming down my cheek. lol idk something like that.
His eyes started to water, drops then shed from his eyes.
leaks of wet ___ poured out of his eyes???

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